We
slept in what had once been the gymnasium. Now it is just an abandoned church on
the edge of a dark town, shadowed by overgrown, sarcastic pines that cover our
roof in layers of needles. The needles are in varying shades of brown, some
brittle and sharp, poking out of weathered crevices in our boards. The weight
of it all - the needles, the dimness, the forgotten-ness of it all makes us
want to crumble.
We
miss the sounds of children playing, their squeaking shoes adding to the chaos
of shrill squeals of joy as a ball made its way into the basket with a swish. Whistles blew, parents cheered,
the applause thundered around our walls in acoustic delight. We even miss the
quiet of church services, murmurs of prayers echoing together as feathered hats
and too-tight neckties bowed in honor to their God. It was still community –
many spirits coming together as one to celebrate, for a winning basketball game
or answered prayers.
Now
we only know silence. And the creaking of our age.
Many
of us don’t remember where we came from. I do. It seems to be one of the
memories that the years can’t extinguish. I remember the repose of the forest. The
soundlessness there was different than here. Here, there are regrets of times
lost and the fear of the future. Back “home”, we had promise. We had peace. We
had the strength of who we are… who we were. The still tranquility of our own
community spoke volumes in itself.
Our
leaves were soft, not the spiky missiles of the aromatic needles that covered our
roof. Those of us who were lucky enough to be vertical felt for our brothers
and sisters who withstood the pricks of falling nature. We had light back home. We had
the sun beaming through our tallest limbs with radiance and warmth. Here, there
are musky shadows. The trees outside block any chance of warmth, and I can feel
my surface becoming alive with mold. The beautiful chestnut coloring is quickly
becoming overgrown by blackness - much like the hopes of my comrades underneath
and overhead, as well as alongside me.
Until
we are rediscovered, we only have our whispered memories.
Master Class |
We slept in what had once
been the gymnasium.
Wow. I love reading stories told from a non-human perspective and you have done a marvelous job!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Eric! I really have discovered a love for writing as a non-human, and may take this to a new chapter.
DeleteSo intriguing. I love your description throughout this piece. It makes me want more.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Stacey! I think I may continue this one. :)
DeleteOh wow, this was so haunting and sad, as if you have to read it in whispers, not a full voice.
ReplyDeleteI felt the loss, the missing pieces , you wrote them just right.
Thank you, Kir. Standing in a redwood grove does inspire whispers. Perhaps that will be a prequel.
DeleteYour description is absolutely aching in this piece. The idea that it can be harder to remember than forget is so true... for trees and for people.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Angela. Remembering is much harder sometimes.
DeleteThe description of the "used to be" is stunning. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThank you so very much for reading, and your kind comment! I hoped to get that right. :)
Deletefabulous imagery and haunting use of prose to make the reader really feel for the protagonist of this...even if its not 'human'
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Thank you kindly, Carrie! I look forward to continuing this tale, even if only briefly.
Deleteit's a skill to be able to use words like 'sarcastic' to describe a pine tree and have it make sense, but your writing flows beautifully and those dashes of otherness give it a unique flavor that i enjoyed, very much
ReplyDeleteThank you so much , Shannon! I love sticking words where they don't normally belong, and am happy it worked out in this case.
DeleteAwesome. Very interesting, something written from the perspective of a tree. I never would have thought of doing something like that!
ReplyDeleteHi Cheney, and thank you! I have found that I love writing from different perspectives, as it helps me feel more "me" in the end... If that makes sense. :)
DeleteThe yearning here is heartbreaking. This is so good. Beautiful descriptions. I sigh with the trees.
ReplyDeleteAs ancient as trees can get, it must be a treasure to remember the past, when all that stretches ahead is endless whiteness. Beautiful job!
ReplyDelete"Until we are rediscovered, we only have our whispered memories." Perfect ending...
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