“Are you KIDDING me?”
“I don’t know how it happened. We used everything.”
“I don’t want it.”
“I thought you’d be happy.”
“I don’t want it. What part of that don’t you understand?”
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| Trifextra Week Fifty-Three: Write 33 words of a dialogue |
Oh,how sad & disappointing for one to want the baby & the other not to!So important for both to take responsibility & decide together for the baby needs a family-with both parents in it.Well written-a complete piece:-)
ReplyDeleteThank you. Heartbreak like that is a huge disappointment.
DeleteAw, ouch. Definitely a loaded topic take on the prompt! Good one :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much. Definitely a loaded topic and a painful realization.
DeleteVery real and sad. Well written dialogue.
ReplyDeleteIt was very real and very sad. I appreciate your comment.
DeleteVery sad story that happens to often. Terrific writing.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bo. I was amazed to realize that it happened so often.
DeleteThat's horrible! (The situation, not the writing.) A friend of mine faced this - her boyfriend left when she got pregnant, but she kept the baby...he's graduating high school next year.
ReplyDeleteCongratulations to both your friend and her son. That is wonderful and a positive end to a sad situation.
DeleteConversation happens far too often, I'm afraid. You nailed the conflict well in 33 words.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Yes, that conversation is way too common these days.
DeleteHow intensely sad. You've nailed it.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much. 33 words can't quite get the shock in there, too.
DeleteWell, given the name of your blog, I'd say this could be a really scary meal!
ReplyDeleteLOL!!! I LOVE your comment, and how you saw it totally different!
DeleteSharp and sad. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSad, but still I imagine this happens far too many times.
ReplyDeleteHmm, a troubling conversation ): Now I kinda feel guilty because I'd probably react the same way! o__o
ReplyDeleteI read this like two people were assembling something like a piece of furniture and one of them didn't like it once it was done. Then I after reading the other comments realized my mistake. Either way it was well done!
ReplyDeleteCorinne, thanks for commenting on mine, yes, same topic, so ironic. And isn't this a classic response? Interesting take - for most of the conversation (except for "I thought you'd be happy," which has to be the woman's line, cuz she's the one peeing on the stick!), it could almost be interchangeable. BRAVA pn your 33! Peace, Amy
ReplyDeletesadly it is still a prevalent thought, apparently, that it is totally one person's "fault". Sorry this happened. Thanks for writing it.
ReplyDeleteHow hard to be the side of that conversation that truly was happy.
ReplyDeleteWell done on a difficult topic.
I'm more impressed with the one person's ability to know, immediately, what he/she does and doesn't want. I can't make a decision to save my life. :-)
ReplyDeleteWhat a difficult situation to be in. Both parties are wishing for something different...
ReplyDeleteWell done. Took me a few reads to figure out what was going on. Lots in 33 words... last line ends it I think.
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